Pain.. four letters.. a powerful word..
A sensation -A cut in your flesh, a bleeding wound, a gash in ur skin
Or a lack of it - A deep loss, chasm in your heart, an empty feeling
I stand in the rain
To numb my pain
Clutching tightly onto the sand in my hand, now trickling.
Love.. four letters.. a powerful word..
A gift on your birthday, a wish of success, a teddy bear, a kiss
Or the million sacrifices for that one moment of happiness
I sit in my alcove
Thinking abt love
Holding onto my treasure chest, memories of pure bliss
Fear.. four letters.. a powerful word..
Spooky nights, horror movies, ghosts, an apparition
Or the realisation that your loneliness is truth, not fiction
None can see or hear
What is this fear?
Trying to shut out the millions of images.. the premonition..
Luck.. four letters... a powerful word..
Crossed fingers, four leaved clovers , tooth fairies, shooting stars
Or the appearance of an angel, only sane thing in all this farce
"Doesnt last for long, chuck..
Dont rely on this thing - luck "
Hoping against hope, this joy it brought is not fleeting, not sparse
23 comments:
A very very beautiful poem!!
this gal succeeds in every thing she does..
n now she has started writing poems..
n the beginning has been made with a wonderful one..
srav, all the best for future endeavous..
looking forward to more great poems from u :)
As per your request:
U R BRILLIANT!!!
:D :D :D
keep blogging! :)
The first and the last one keep altering in my life
(Love and Luck)!
Never they go hand in hand! :D
Good one Srav! :)
welcome (back) to the world of blogging.
i really like how u capture subtle emotions and convert them to beautiful words.. u really can write man...
You very much do know the meanings... thats what I surmise from the ease with which you make me feel each emotion as I read your couplets.
@ Swatilekha and anshuman
Thanks a million..
@ vinu..
I knw i am good! :P thanks anyway!
@ aftab and priya..
Oh Gods of blogs.. thank you for bestowing your blessings!
@ dushy..
sigh pain n fear go hand in hand.. but never love n luck alva.. sad!!
@ shal
muah darling.. thank u so much!
@ sheeni
Hey thanks a million for reading my blog.. and really i ve tried to figure out wat they mean .. n every time i do.. i m just more confused!
@ veeresh..
Thank you for that brilliant pic!
Welcome!
Nice nice nice :-)
But as I said, put other four letter words too :P
@ CB
yea yea yea... lol.. u ll never change!! will make the other four lettered word the inspiration of my next piece which i shall dedicate to u!! :P
Brave woman!
Doesn't really seem like your first attempt.
Good job, though!
Welcome back to the blogging world. Nice first post. But i've seen your other work. So i know you can do much better. Lets hope we all get to see it. :)
I remember reading the following testimonial quite some time back "words are mere feeble expressions of the greater sentiments that engulfs one's heart...".
The melancholy in those words suggests a deep sense of loss and desertedness. I won't say it's beautifully crafted, but yeah it has, to a larger extent, captured those subtle moments of adversity rather impressively. All in all a huge question mark {like those beautiful droplets that formed one in that Pic} that remains is have ya at least now truly got the meaning of those words-:)
Cheers,
Celebrating Life..
my favorite:
I stand in the rain
To numb my pain
Clutching tightly onto the sand in my hand, now trickling.
u have 'the' passion for it gal....go for it...write more..makes ur readers 'feel'...im really moved by these three lines....its more like i actually can feel the kind of desperation or helplessness that the lines convey.....as if i wud know what it really is to stand in the rain and see the sand trickle...phew!im blabbering!i guess u know how much i liked it
"Lucky u r to be in Love,
Fearful u r of losing tht Love,
Painful it is to lose tht Love."
In short dear, Love is the most powerful four-letter word
four letter word i do knw the meaning of
Srav - four letters - a sweet gal
but mere words cant describe, the wonder she is
ccd, incidents, red gold, perry ellis
shes a tough fighter
now turned writer
shes my dearest frnd n my limerick nemesis
to the best beginner blogger on the planet, hell the best at whatever she does! what can i say but im so glad i found u! :)
sorry for the late comment but then hey its customary to save the best for the last ;)
I haven't commented yet? :O The hell! It's beautiful srav... My fave is the first paragraph too... damn people give such vivid imageries... how am I supposed to compete with my unfunny stories? :D
umm.... uhhh..huh
wot do i say?....srsly...u ryt sumthin lyk tht n expect me to commnt? i m ****** speechless.. damn ..
i hate ppl who ryt so well...thts so damnd unfair
btw sravas cat i luvya
awesum post for a begginer
keep up de gud work srav srav
Very nice.. you take your readers to situations when they actually felt them..
pretty cool :)
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